Awe. That's really sad. It was pretty good. Flowed well & came from your heart. It had a lot of emotion & truth in it.

A few things:

He always guarded me,he didn't let anybody to bring me down [I think you should get rid of the 'to' in there, so it will flow better & also I think 'anybody' should be 'anyone'].

Bond was between us,when we even couldn't figure out who we are [Bond was between us, even when we couldn't figure out who we were].

Just my opinions to making it sound a bit better & flow better. And also if you put spaces after your commas, it won't look so crammed together. :]

Good job though.

Keep it up.

Bri.x

Bri is right but still this is a great poem and very tru to the heart there is great flow and i love reading your works

This was so sweet, yet sad at the same time (toward the end). Young love, its the best. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

The wording was really off in this piece. not one of my favourites

much love and many kisses,
bex

I like your ideas and what you are saying, but some editing will make this a much tighter piece, I agree with Bri Bri, and the changes she suggested, some of the words don't fit. with that said, it is still a good poem, and conveys emotion nicely

Awww so sad, every thing is really good except there was a few mistakes can easily be fixed though, the commas, you might want an extra space so it wouldn't so crowded in one line.. and the forth line.. maybe it should be Between us there was a bond.. something like that... other than that it is great keep up the work!! 4/5