Wow, this is an amazing poem. it's emotion flows perfectly, and it is so deep.
"As my hope begins to shatter,
I watch myself fall down
I need someone to save me from myself
Yet I scream without a sound"
it is just absolutely gorgeous,
5/5
gabriella

Beautiful poem, and as stated by the person before me, the emotion flows perfectly throughout. 5/5

I really liked this poem, I loved how you porrayed it, The flow was spot on. Greatly penned This was an enjoyable read. Well done~mel 5/5

I loved it! It had awesome flow and it explained the story without over loading it with cliches and metaphors and everything. Good job!

"A happy ending filled with lies
As we take a look behind the scenes,
I slowly start to die. "

^^ I especially liked those lines, they said soemthing to me, I don't know what but it realyl struck me. Keep up the good writing. (:

5/5

The flow wasnt all that great in the first 2, 3 lines but it got better. But other than that I loved it!

"As the disappointment surfaces
I watch myself begin to bleed
These red tears begin to fall
For my heart has been deceived"

Love these lines.
5/5

Brilliant poem. Very well written. Also emotional :( Keep up the excellent work!! Xx Chrissie

Amazing. Thats it. Lol nothing else to it. I absolutely loved it! The title got me hooked. Lol then I read it and I was overly surprised. I wasn't expecting something so good. Your ending was wonderfull. The last few sentances were my favorite. The only thing I would change about this is that there are no stanzas and so it looks a bit overwhealming. Other then that it is perfect. Great job. Keep it. And thank you for the comment.

God bless

~skittles

This was really well written, I liked the flow and how you wrote it, very nice to read.

That was very good. I love it. Though I would of liked it better in stanzas, it's still a 5/5. Well done!

-Liz-
~life to live~