I loved this poem it really catches ur feelings and shows them to the world its everything that i want to say but im too afraid of you did a great job writing this poem 5/5

''I wanna tell someone wants wrong, but no one will listen to me.''

I think you meant 'what's' instead of wants.

I liked this, the emotion and depth in this piece, overwhelmed me, I'm just sorry you're feeling this way.
I thought it flowed well and you did a great job with such a sad subject.

I like where you're going with this poem however, have you thought about doing it line by line like

I'm not Happy.
But I'll fake it.
Act as though nothings wrong,
but truth is my worlds torn apart

etc

its just a different arrangement, something to think about =]

I like it.
but know, that you really are not alone when you have the fishbowl at your beck and call okay?

much love

I think a lot of ppl are like this, well i know i am some times. a fake.

brought out a lot of true emotion, i feel for you.

5/5 David

People do care about you. I feel like this sometimes, but you'll come out the other end, you'll be suprised how many others feel like this tbh .. xxx

I love ur poems!!! they r great and show a lot of emotion. in this poem especially i think i know wat ur talking about, iv had lot of pain myself, and i will promise u, there will never be somthing that u can not handle

Wow this is really good. i liked the flow of it 5/5