Rachel
How heart wreching...beautifully written.the emotions brought tears to my eyes. Excellent job!

Mountain top I can not reach,
Choking tears distort my speech.
I alone hear my echo call,
On deaf ears my words do fall.
I search the mountain for trails of us,
All that's left is memories dust.

I loved this stanza :)
Love Cindy

Aww this is really good! and i can relate to it! it flowed so nicely and i think you did a wonderful job on it! 5/5

~Kristina

This was heartfelt and sad and yet very well written.
I loved it.

Rachel this beautifully sad. Really like it....flow, word choices, rhyming....all so good....really liked this part:

You turn your back and disappear,
And though my eyes shed not a tear.
My soul is flooded with utter despair,
You walked away without a care

5/5

Beautifully written.....absolutely amazing. I felt the pain and sorrow and hurt all over again. I related so much to this piece. Co-dependent women thinking we cannont survive without the prescence of the one we gave our all. Misdirecting where we really need to look to find ourselves......deep within. I suppose that's why I related more to these lines.
^^"I don't define you" you respond,
"Look not to me, but far beyond"
"If true love shall cause you pain,
Than this love must be in vain"
"Please don't leave, my final plea"
"But you deserve much more than me."

Great Job
Dixie

Outstanding write. and such a sad story. 5/5 all the way.

Heartbreaking painful write.....
"Please don't leave, my final plea"
"But you deserve much more than me." seems the world just broke
in tiny pieces.....
awesomely sad write..