by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere Mar 2, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
**Okay I know this exactly ain't my best but I tried to write a poem for all those who were or are heartbroken. This is suppose to be about a girl in a bar wondering what went wrong in her relationship to make her bf break up. But you all got your own ways or putting things in so yeah. ENJOY!!** |
by A F
I love it! One of my favorite poems! |
I dont like "to make his image go away again" on the last line. i think the poem would end really well without that there, but it was a wicked poem all the same! well done |
Very nice. I loved this. It flowed pretty well & was just so beautifully written. The emotion in this was so deep & strong. The sadness just poured out of this. |
Wow. Awesome. Sounds like an elton john song lmfao! I really like it, how you made it seem as if the main "character" was so hopeless that all he had was his beer. It seems you put your heart in it, and it shows. I did not recognize any spelling errors, and besides the fact that it is an odd and original topic to write about, the poem is virtually flawless. |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Mm. i loved this poem. your did greatly!!! i wonder what it is like to be a bartender. it seems like they learn so much from other realtionships, i wonder if they actually have good realtionships themselves, and if they give good advice... |