Omg great poem, 5/5 keep up the good work, This was truely a poetic piece, I espicailly loved the begginings

Michelle i know you let me read theis a couple days ago.. but i decided to comment it, i really do think this is a good poem. You should try to get more people to read it.. im sure alot of people would like it.
5/5 , nice job.

Your brother, David :)