With this poem you need to add some lines together, don't split them, cause its harder to read.

but still i gave you a 5! David

This is a good poem, but I think that the flow is a bit off. Keep trying though :D

Aww this is really sad, but i really like it a lot. and i can kind of relate to this in a way. amazing job you did on it! 5/5

~Kristina

Ok first off the word her gets a little bit to repetitive... I think this poem needs better words the idea was great but you'' get better