Breaking Down.

by Kaitlin   Mar 4, 2007


Turn On The Shower,
Lock the Door.
Fall Upon The Tile,
And Cry Once More.
Grab A Towel,
To Damp The Sounds.
Don't Let A Soul Hear,
That You're Breaking Down.

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  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Well, it was very short, but that's okay poems can be short. The flow was very good. The rhymes were basic, but were still good. I feel that you could have been more creative with your word choice, but this was a good poem for someone who is new to poetry, well for anyone for the matter. I can relate to it a lot. More people enjoy reading poems they can relate to, but sometimes it's nice to try writing poems that most people couldn't relate to and see if they still like what you wrote. Overall, it was a nice poem. Keep it up! I'm sure once you start writing more poems you will be an excellent writer, which you already are a good writer, but you could improve just a alittle bit in some places. I hope my comment helps! =]

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

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