Very good! 4!

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Very nice Very nice!

Wow... i felt like i was actually there watching the whole thing.. i love how you didn't portray yourself as the victim... catchy i wouldn't change a thing...
LoVe
Monica

It was amazing its like i was in the poem just waiting then going through that scenario ...Amazing 5/5

'I will remain here 'til the day i die,
That day is comming ever so slow'
very powerful part in the poem, very good last line.

your vocabulary thorughout and your use of words was brilliant.

although as ... says ^ some parts were quite awkward, fixing them could really enhance your poem.

there was alot of emotion behind the poem.

i had to read the poem a few times, cause i didn't no what you were talking about at the start but i got into it :]

well done

amy x

"That day is comming ever so slow. "
'coming'

Wow, I really fancied the rhymes. They were really catch. It flowed really well. I also liked the vivid imagery. Your choice of words were great, made it very descriptive, which was easy to imagine.