Shin

by Aken Sol   Mar 5, 2007


As her fingers reach out to touch mine
I wonder
Does she want my body or my heart?
Maybe both?
I ask for the money in advance

She's not necessarily easy,
Just lonely
Like all the other girls who seek my...
attention
I can tell by looking in her eyes.

I don't recall when I became a
hollow shell
People would keep taking parts of my
heart and soul.
No one tried giving anything back.

It's not easy to gain acclimation
to the cold
To steal thier hearts before they steal mine
Natural
Her hands were warm as I played my role

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  • 16 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Shin = death?
    Superb poem, ambiguous but very...pretty~¿
    I can't think of a more fitting adjective for it, it's very pretty, albeit in a morbid sort of sense.
    5/5, great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Somber Esprit

    Regardless of all the above comments, I thought this piece was wonderful. It seemed very sad, and it was like a window into a larger story. the poem was set in the present, but leaft questions about the past.
    I really liked it!

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, greatly written dark poem, with excellently created atmosphere in it. I like it from the beginning to the end, but my favorite stanza is:

    -I don't recall when I became a
    hollow shell
    People would keep taking parts of my
    heart and soul.
    No one tried giving anything back.-

    Very powerful piece, so effective.
    5/5 from me

  • 17 years ago

    by Hatori

    Hmmm... I don't really understand this poem, but perhaps you could explain it to me more. You don't have to, only if you want to. Either in comment on this poem or a PM, either is good :D.
    I look forward to reading other poems by you in the future :D.

    With all due respect,
    Hatori
    The Illusionist

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    No offense taken =).

    I think discussion is important and often left out.

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