by S R P Mar 5, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Do you feel me lurking in the dark? |
by ReBecca
The flow on this was hard for me to follow. I feel the sense of betrayal, but it doesnt ever totally eclipse. I think this could be a magnificent poem, if it had some editing. It started out good and got choppy. I kept waiting for something. I think you got something here, but it has no flow, or prose. |
by Krzysztof J
This is fantastic!! 5/5 |