by Gasttlee Mar 5, 2007
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
What is your purpose? |
Okay. I'm sorry. I just simply can't take these apart because it's really hard to read this. I mean, I understand it. It's just the rhyme's were REALLY forced, and I mean each one. when every line rhymes like that its overwhelming for the reader. Also, when you have 3 lines, then 2 for the rest of the poem, then randomly add in 4, it doesn't suit the flow well. I would try not to do that if I were you, otherwise.. it was ok. |
by Christina
I didnt like this poem very much im srry but it seemed way to forced with the rhyming! |
by pookiengurgi
Wonderfully written,you have really awesome work..keep it up! |
by Lady Nik
Awesome poem i really liked it, i can tell you have an amazing talent. Keep it up and thank you so much for the comment they really make my day. Thank Shanik |
by Fredy
Well, like the other one, this one is really good |