He got what he wanted

I absolutely loved this poem. I've felt what you went through and I know how you felt and this poem is a great representation of that. Your emotions come out strongly and the flow was great.

"He told me I was beautiful
He said I had it all
But after he got what he wanted
He left me there to fall"

I love this part the most because thats what most guy do.

5/5 amazing poem

Nice ending, good poem. :) sorry i'm leaving such skimpy comments lol i just dont always have a lot to say.

This is so sad but its very good

Wow, so much emotion within this poem. This was an excellent write, just a few minor mistakes here and there which I am about to explain. Other than that this was greatly written. Keep up the great work.

This line, "About in tears from pain" I think it would flow better if you worded it like this, "Almost in tears from pain"

Also this line, "I smiled at him he didn't even care" I think would flow better if you changed it to this, "I smiled at him and he didn't even care"

Again, this line, "He acted like i wasn't there" I think would flow better if it was, "And he acted like i wasn't even there"

Yet again, I think this line, "And said excuse me remember me" would flow better if you changed it to this, "And said excuse me, do you remember me?"

This line, "Your that chick who gave it to me" you used the wrong "your" it should be "you're"

Peace, Joe

Hello,
Again I can really empathise with this poem, so I think that it's fantastically written.
I like it that his poem reads like a story, and it's so easy to read.
I this is what your going through and you want to talk send me a PM.
Well done honey x