Sad but sweet. Dave its not my business but its easy to see you 2 have love. Stop overthinking it! Try and not wait for her, cos she is waiting on u :P I no u 2 will stay together foreva...James

Man this poems a roller coaster ride. to be honest when i saw four line stanzas followed by 3 line stanzas i was expecting to hear a choppy sounding poem but man does it flow nicely. great emotion impact for the read and entertaining to read. thanks

This is really sad. i liked the emotion in it very much! the flow was pretty good! keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

This is a great poem. it is sad and beautiful with lots of emotion. I hope it all works out for you in the end.
5/5

Kalee

Its good 5/5

This poem is absolutelyl beautiful love the way you expressed your feelings and emotions. i just think your great!!

I really liked the emotion expressed in this. Some of the imagery created was really vivid, too. Keep it up.

This is a beautiful poem, and I don't think there are even words to tell or explain how it makes people think and feel when they read it. Love is a part of life and it will always be taken and not given back. But the key is to keep loving and never stop.

Thats an excellent poem, keep writing. take kare x x x

Thats an excellent poem, keep writing. take kare x x x

Wow... this is forcefully sad. Definitely makes the reader think.

Nice word choice and rhythm, though the flow is a bit off in some places.

Still, I really enjoyed reading this poem so 5/5.

GREAT FLOW!! awesome flow man!! i loved it, you really have the emotion behind you 100% in your poems! i loved it man, another 5/5 from me!

xoxo Lucy

You seem to have a heartbreak theme in all the poems I had read.
remember that there are other topics to write on but also remember that what comes from the heart is what makes a great poem. So that would be why you have a lot of heartbreak poems I assume
4.5

Wow... this poem is soooo gut wrenchingly emotinal.. made me tear up a bit.. probably because I could relate to it so well... The poem in itself flows wonderfully, and the wording as superb as usual, but the message behind this, of such terrible sadness, it's overwhelming.. a great poem 5/5 as usual!!
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Awwwww, such a touching poem!
I love all off your poems, David, you are so talented. You really are!

Take care, my sweet

xxIngridxxx