I really really liked this... you definately have a way of compelling the reader. VERY relatable. One question... did you mean "breathe" or "breath"?

Short but extremely powerful write!
I also think you chose the perfet title.

I loved how you made if just vague enough to let the reader take whatever they wanted out of it. Nice job, very short but very powerful. Sometimes its hard being the fly but sumtimes its important. thanx for sharing this with us all

Pretty good. I haven't read anything by you in a while. Very enjoyable!
PV

Wow really good how long have u done poems?