by *Charisma*
Oh...i hate suicide. But as far as the poem itself goes, very good. It was intense, frightening, and dark. A good piece of poetry, though not a personal preference. :) |
The last line broke it off. But I love the original concept I've never heard a poem about this before and the first time was spectacular. |
by KT Mackey
The last line was kinda reminding me of "Okay, lets get this over with." but other than that, its real good. |
by Allison
I thought this poem was REALLY interesting. I think your writing style is really good! =] 5/5 |
by katie
It was really touching it sounded so real |
by Hope
It was to "dark"... but da start n da middle was alryt... |
by Jessica
I like ur writing this is a rele good poem,, i liked it bcz it ended wih there is only one way out,, i liked how u thought of that,, that was very good,, i can tell u have a big imagination |
by Jenni Marie
Ohhhh I love this! |
I love this poem and i like what u did with it too good job 5/5 d3f! |
Really dark....but it was o.k. |
by Willow
Very tragic story. the last few lines were very shocking but fell into place nicely. i enjoyed reading this poem. one of the best i've read today. 5/5. love willow oxox |
My god that was incredibly written!!! I enjoyed reading that VERY much! that was GREAT! |
I love the last line good |
by Natalie
A very interesting poem. I love the concept which you are writing about. Through the eyes of a socially established "mad man." |
by Ike Dizzle
Dang...That was great scenery lol. It felt like i was there. I'm still like dang...great job |
by Rachel RTVW
Too many I's, me's, my's...... but a decent interpretation of what may go on in the mind of someone who is mentally ill. |
Theres nothing i can say that someone else hasn't already mentioned. but just wanted to let you know i enjoyed it. |
This is poem is lovely cause it is like me a lot. good job and keep up the good work. |
This poem rocks!!! Though it's quite morbid... I really enjoyed reading it. "Dine with death instead"??? pls... not yet!!! Write more instead!!! Life is wonderful... God bless you!!! |
I would have to say the slang was done in the highest taste like folk lyric |