by Goran Rahim
A perfect poem with a perfect message once again, great job my dear. |
Aww! this was sad. i feel that way towards my sister sometimes, like shes so much better. it hurts. chin up. |
by Kaila
I can relate to this poem entirely! I feel almost the exact same way...it hurts I know and I think you wrote way better then I ever could so theres another + for ya lol 5/5 |
OMG Great poem! Gotta admit kinda made me feel bad though its very aimed at the audience which works powefully, I felt it was very agressive. I loved it but if you wanna go for a softer touch maybe you could add a verse or two twisting so it becomes about the victims feelings and not the perpetrator something like It's not nice, is it/ to be told these things/ But i hear them/ I am them - etc etc - i never said I was, its just an idea - keep writing cos you got talent =) |