by ShootingStar179 Mar 8, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
When a man cried over a girl, |
by Mr M
So touching.... |
I really liked the ending of the poem, it tied it together really good. A greatly penned piece full of emotion, I loved it. |
by Kaila
Oh wow poor guy!! I know what he has or is going through. and it sucks major! But I think you expressed the feelings very very well in this poem it was an excellent write You did a great job I loved the rhyming it made the poem flow more nicely and it had a certain rhythm to it I also loved the last stanza because now i know what your going through as well I've had many scenerios like this and I know it hurts but again great poem nice job!! keep up the good work 5/5 for sure! love kaila |
Oh wow.. that was an amazing poem. I can totally relate to this poem, because I was going through the same thing at the beginning of this year. It was so hurtful, because he didn't even know I existed, and yet.. I like him so much. But anyway, enough about me, and more about the poem. The poem was GREAT!! The flow and the wording was really well, awesome choice of words. It's so filled with raw emotion, it just makes your heart ache and want to reach out to the girl in this poem, because at one point or another, we all have a love like this one. Its good that through out the whole poem you keep a constant theme of the girl wishing he would see that she loves him and that he would love her too. Its a wonderful write! Great job, you have a lot of talent as a poet, I hope it takes you far! 5/5 |
by Tricky Daze
There is just a thing breaks the rhyme,use didn't instead of did not |