I enjoyed the unique vision of this poem, especially the comparision to a drug. You wrote it quite elequently and with a great deal of passion. This poem has a lot of personal meaning to me also, most likely in a different way than you wrote it for, but because of its meaning for me, I enjoyed reading it even more. You had an amazing flow to your words. Nice write. |
by XxbekkaxX
Its a very good poem...i love it!! |
I love it=) its sad but also sweet, great work 5/5 |
Hmm...well I don't totally agree with the Jordan guy...But yeah I do agree it's not your best. However ^^ I don't think it would be completely fair to rank your poems. Because to me, each and everyone one of my poems are different and I don't categorize them from the best to the worst. Each tell a different story, like different strands in your hair. You can't like one more than the other. This poem was another story for you I presume? And well, it may not be as vivid as another one, but never the less, it had that same flow and uniqueness which you deliver in most of your poems :)...That's a good way to put it...hehe...Well I liked it...though at times it was confusing on the whole I got the point. Quite a heart renchingp point in fact. To be longing for someone and not able to show it due to circumstances. |
by Jenni Marie
Oh this was beautiful... |
This is good. You present the story very well and it progresses smoothly. |
by Silent Words
What inspires you to write? is there a girl in your life who you feel can never be yours? all though I don't know you, and have read very little of your poems (for now), I feel like I can relate to your feelings, keep writing, I'll keep reading. |
by ben thompson
Awesome write. i really enjoyed it. 5/5 from me. |
That is beautiful. i wish someone would write a poem like that for me. :) |
by Vanessa
That was pretty good. the flow was almost flawless. It was an amazing write full of such emtion. Keep up the good work 5/5 |
by Teria
I didn't expect the ending to be like that, I figured it'd be more of a rejection type thing. But, making it what I think it will be.. well, that's just not you. Lol. |
This is an amazing poem! great job. brought tears to my eyes! keep it up!!! |
by Chelsea King
I really like this poem because it reminds me so much of my life. It has lots of thought put into it. You are a great writer!! |
by Jenni Marie
Now let me just say before I go through each stanza..I LOVE this!! |