Blood and Ribbons

by N J Thornton   Mar 8, 2007


Many years ago,
I looped that raspberry ribbon
through your sunny curls,
and as we giggled you muttered
"as long as I'm wearing this ribbon,
I'm your little girl."

-

Yesterday, you visited home.
Your band was frayed, yet it still
wrapped your sleek hair.
I was admiring your maturity,
when with an uneasy expression,
your warm hands pinched my fingers
around the bow, and showed me the
gold circling your finger.

My smile began to rain,
but still your eyes gently beckoned
my hand to pull.

"It's time," you whispered.

My hand (and heart) withdrew, and the
ribbon became limp,
and slid past your gladden face,
into my palm,
as a benign trickle grazed your cheek.

Softly kissing the ribbon,
your eyes imitated mine
and you hushed,
"for as long as you have this ribbon,
I'll be your loving daughter."

**This still needs a lot of work, so any suggestions are welcome. But come on, how easy is this to understand?!!

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  • 16 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    This is great...i don't think anything needs to be done to it....as for understanding it i find it easy...this one is an amazing poem don't change anything..i love the images created through your words..which are perfect in every aspect...the flow wonderful...i just LOVE it...this one is soooooo going on the favorite's list.
    <3 silhouette

  • 17 years ago

    by Cherish

    This poem is written with such passion and emphasis, it truly shows....it is such a beautiful poem which i just want to read again and again! If you do anything else like this just tell me please, i would love to read it. This poem just had me smiling at the beauty and passion of it and the though and care put into each and every word of meaning 5/5
    good work
    Cherish xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle

    I really liked this poem. I loved the symbol of the ribbon, and you provided a lot of lovely imagery through out the piece. I love the inspiration of hurting, but letting go, then seeing the beauty and love behind it. I especially loved the lines,
    "Your band was frayed, yet it still ...
    My smile began to rain...as a benign trickle grazed your cheek"

    Overall i loved the point of the poem; that though times may change other things remain the same. I agree, it could use a little work at the beginning, but I'll still rate it well considering it still touched me and i love the symbolism/imagery

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Utterly beautiful. You just... have a way with stories and narrations, and bringing oddities and original stories to life. It is incredible how this story had so much meaning, yet i still find i have yet to comprehend the full meaning of this poem. It just seems... perfect. Every word seems flawless and... resonating.
    Never stop writing.
    Your birthday will be a holiday someday, trust me.

    Keep the ink running.
    Beautiful title.
    I am suggesting this for the weekly contest.
    If someone else read it, you would have a large chance.
    5/5
    ~Stephen White

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