I liked it!!

You have many grammar and spelling errors in this piece. "upset" not "up set". "Fair" not "fare". There's just a few.

Also, you make yourself very redundant. You said "you" all the time. Your reader will understand the subject if you say it once. Use details!

3/5

The rythm is a little off, but if read a certain way, it is okay. This paragraph is slightly confusing:

But when you're up set,
you take it out on everyone.
Thats not fare to everyone
around you, you should know
that by now my friend.
Especially when half
the people don't know why,
you are so up set.

Maybe that is what is tunning people away. Keep trying though

Hatori

Another well done poem!
Keep up the great work.
Thank you for commenting
and rating my poems!
God bless 5/5
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Upset is one word, and you put fire instead of fair.

Overall, I liked this poem. I think it lacked a bit of creativity, and emotion. but, it was a pretty good poem. Keep it up.

Upset is one word, and fire should be fair. Other than great job 5/5