This poem diden't do it for me it had the emotion but by the time Id'e got half way through I was getting bored it needs to be split up in to 3 or 4 stanzas this would help keep the reader intrested.

So that had a great story behind it, and it came fromt he heart, thats all that matters. but I felt this was more a rant more than a poem. And I really couldn't find a rhym until the end...But I don't know if I just read it wrong...

Good Job though 5/5