God-Smacked by Realization

by Tripp   Mar 9, 2007


Not entirely sure whether or not I like this...it seems sort of shaky on rhyme and stuff. whatever.

This Molotov cocktail
exploding in my heart
I feel like I'm gonna fail
as its tearing me apart

Helpless to stop what will happen
I think he's turned his back on me
either that or he's just nappin'
one way or another I'm still alone
still walking this path of life on my own

Just me and my thoughts, my memories
just my past actions, left here to follow me
haunted by what I have once done
the sky of my soul turned black, left with no sun

It's really funny, the stuff people can do
how we sin, then pray and turn around like new
what you do doesn't leave you just like that
it follows you forever, like some 'gangsta tat'

realization struck me, struck me hard
hit me like a brick, I'd been a retard
I did some bad stuff, now I'm paying the price
because of my actions I'm cold, my heart is ice

In the end we're all just the same
we're all players in life's game
some people lose, and some people win
some people pray and some people sin

By this fact, I've been god smacked
if I could I would turn around and go back
but it's too late, what's done is done
Now I wanna kill myself, just over some old fun

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  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    Wow- POWERFULL. I was a little confused. Your statement is a little unclear. But either way you kicked some a*s with it. Great job! I'm sorry about earlier... But God hasnt forgotten you. He has his own bizzare timing, but whatever way it works. Just like girls are to guys -it is inexplainable. The fact that he has people thinkin and constantly coming to him, tells you something. Believe me your going to get your answers what ever they may be. Oh by the way your second stanza has 5 lines and the rest have four, incase you didnt notice. But on with it, lol I love the emotions you draw out with this one. There are no imagry descriptions but you can still get a picture from your rhythm, and the emotion that flows from your words. Its great. In all the second stanza was my favorite. The "nappin" thing was funny, and the flow was great. The rhymes were good aswell. Its also good how you waited until the ending to bring the title into the piece. Its like what I did with my poem the Love thorn. Its great. keep it up.

    God Bless

    ~skittles

  • 17 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    You better not do anything ridiculous! I may not know you in person, but from reading your poems, I have sincere love for you!

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychel

    Great poem,but tripp, i need u. dont kill urself. please and thanks.

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