This is A really good poem!

Woah intense!! I felt your anger and it was an amazing poem...honestly David I don't know where you get all of your creativity! Nice job 5/5 always
From me

Thanks for the comment on my poem!!! so I wanted to return the love lol this poem was great i coukd feel the emotion!!! Keep up the great write!

This is a great read David. you could really feel the hatered in it and all of the emotion. 5/5

Kalee

Very sad yet incredibily beautiful and well-written. People often do feel like they've been beaten when the person they're with leaves, yet somehow we always come out stronger. We always ge tthrough the "war" within ourselves. Amazing poem. 5/5.
<3Raych

and thanks for commenting on my poem

I really like this poem... it has alot of meaning.. thanks for your comment on my poem, it was greatly appreciated. love maddy xxx

Wow. amazing poem! you are such a talented writer. [i'm sure i've said this before] the rhyme scheme was wonderful! great job. 5/5

I didn't care for the first two stanzas much, but this poem quickly improved.

I can definitely relate to the meaning, and it's very well written.

Nice work!

David
Excellent job on this write. The emotions cry out.

For how do I show you?
And what do I have to give
That you were my fortress,
You made me live......

This is so sad :(
Take care Cindy

A very good poem.
You interrupt the flow ones, but that's not very disturbing.
Keep it up.

A very frustrating poem.
Expressive in every way.
Sad yet spiced with anger.
Almost perfect rhyme but still could use some work.

4.5

Awww all of your poems are so sad! and they are all about you losing someone dear to you, a lost love maybe?? well yourpoems show that you really do care, again a 5/5 and

This is really quite good David. If this is about what you were feeling I think we need to talk. But this is really well written, the flow was good and it told the story well with emotion. And congratulations for getting on the front page! I'm so happy hehe. Anyway, great poem. 5/5

Tammie

Wow.. so emotional.. great job. The flow is wonderful, and I like how you create visual interest with the 6th stanza being a line longer. Flow and rythmn are wonderful, as usual! You have some awesome talent, keep up the good work! 5/5
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.