I like it :) it's like a role play uniquely told.
lol, this line in particular though was amuzing.
A mouse? A monster? A mouse? A monster?
nothing?!

I agree with Charlene;
"A mouse? A monster? A mouse? A monster?
nothing?!"
is particularly amazing. I really liked your poem, bit spinny. But then again, I know that feeling.

That was really good! 5/5!