Sin-Shine

by Romancing the Darker Side   Mar 11, 2007


Sunshine turns to sin
Sinshine falls upon my head
I am graced with the beauty of pain
As I once more must face this dread

Clouds turn to darkness
Mounds sit over me
Their contents spill before my soul
As I dare to become free

Trees turn to sadness
Dreams once more shade you
A single leaf comes crashing down
Reconciling pictures you once drew

Breezes turn too hollow
Freezing days are to come
I attempt to end this cruel world
But my pain is not yet done

Rain turns to emptyness
Pain flies in my hair
Multicolored rainbows
Cascade with great despair

Days fade to winters
Dazes are in my mind
You've always been my understanding
Yet mother nature calls, "It's time"

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  • 17 years ago

    by ben thompson

    Great write as usual 5/5 from me

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I'm glad this poem had structure
    The vocabulary was okay
    The message was pretty good
    the way you saud things was nice
    the last stanza ended it well
    I wish it were longer
    5/5
    kaila

  • 17 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    You, to, have a great way with words. I could read the great emotions in this poem.

    I loved the stanza

    `Rain turns to emptyness
    Pain flies in my hair
    Multicolored rainbows
    Cascade with great despair`

    Your 13? That is hard to believe because you write in such a great way. Keep it up!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    I wouldn't normally like a poem like this, but this one was truly amazing, the imagery and fluency was so clever.

    i think the title was truly original and i loved the extended metaphor within this.

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Absolutely beautiful, I wanted to put a line that I liked in particular, but there are so many. This written with so much beauty and I loved how you used nature as a metaphor for what you're expressing. Excellent work!

    ~jas~

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