Get close to heart, cannot
Locked chains will prevail
Will hurt without mercy
The body's golden grail

i loved this paragraph. it was well written. prevail and grail are great words to use.

well done and keep writing!

5/5 David

I didn't like the first line of the poem. 'cannot' really threw it off. The rest of the poem was really good. I liked the rhyme scheme and I liked the flow, both of them were consistant. The last couplet was very well written. It was an interesting piece, the dialogue sort of made it really fun to read. Good job on this poem.

Oh this was pretty good. it had a nice flow. and it was greatly written. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

Very cool. Love the word choice and I love this poem. Great, keep writing you are very good at it:) Another 5/5

First stanza needs fixed a bit..Cannot should've been on the first line..Other that that good job...Great choice of words too..
another 5