Aww i love the last stanza this poems great. Did you e-mail me? I didn't get it :S Anyway dw bout it xxx

I totally agree that sometimes it isn't enough to just be "loved" we need more then that. I loved the 4th stanza it was awesome. amazing poem 5/5

Good job laura keep it up

When the places that you called paradise
Change and turn hell
When people you thought they're nice...
Take me out this marsh I fell

^ Wow. Simply Amazing. Your words flowed perfectly & the emotions were so vivid & deep in my mind.

"When birds sing in the air happily
But you're too sad to hear"

^ I can relate to this couplet so many times, it kind of hit me hard.

All around fantastic write! Keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

O--it was nice..even tho i got only lil..lol..but i was luking a poems smth like this..

Good!!!!!
loved it!
:D

Great job! loved it! im new, so ill be looking up to u other poets for advice and help. 5/5!

Awwww!!! that poem is soo nice! 5/5 good job! good write!

This was just so beautiful!
The imagery you used created vivid pictures, and I thought the whole piece flowed very well.
The wording was beautiful, and the first stanza really pulled me in.
You did a wonderful job.

Well I liked the main theme of this poem. It has a very strong meaning and a very good point to it. But the problem I found was that your rhyme scheme was all over the place. In the first stanza I found that it was legible and there were rhymes where you had put them (aabb). Then in the second stanza, you rhymed 'hear' with 'happily.' And that's not rhyming. It goes on into the third and fourth stanza that you switched rhyming schemes around. If you're going to rhyme, rhyme throughout the whole poem and not just whatever comes to your head. It's confusing, and since I didn't quite understand it the first time I read it, I had to read it again. Please don't take this personally. I am just giving some honest advice. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

Beautiful.. So nicely written.. Keep it up.

Good job you had a strong meaning and powerful words... good job again lol 5/5

I liked this poem, it seemed to flow well, i loved the imagery within it

"When birds sing in the air happily
But you're too sad to hear"

these lines were pretty amazing...

Awesome work, everything flows so nicely. I give this poem 5/5 as well, keep writing im going to look at more of your work!

Wow, this poem was very touching.I loved this poem. Keep up the amazing work. Written very well 5/5
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Truly beautiful poem, I like the rhymes and the way you expressed emotions.
Well done.
5/5

This poem flows very well and te rhyming of the last two lines of each stanza again reflects you style very much I really like this one good poem.

Very touching. I dont neccessarily like the mixed up rhyming scheme. or is this free verse? I don't know, but I did enjoy this poem. I loved how you wrote the last line in each stanza. Very sweet and effective. 5/5

-Shannon <3