Terminal seconds

I liked this but some parts of the flow went off I think it was just due to the rhyme then lack of rhyme in some places. I didn't feel this poem as much as I did with your others I just felt as though something was missing unlike the rest and I believe that to be strength. The meaning wonderful honestly I loved that it was interesting. The word choice simple and effective so i'm really unsure what it is. I guess it's just personal choice. Still a good read. ~Mel

Yea perfect flow and control of pace.. this is this is what i like, improvement. love it.. wish u could critique more.. u got ur style down well