Dream boy

Again a wonderful write that came right from the heart. Excellent write. I must say use puncuation it will make the peice stronger.

This line, "Just don't brake my heart" you used the wrong "brake" it should be, "break" the word you used means like a car brake.

Fouth stanza last line change "wont" to "won't" small error that's all

Peace, Joe

Aww cute, i know the feeling trust me, but he'll be there someday, just don't look for exactly that person, give many a chance.

as for the grammatical part of the poem, it was good, but the flow was a little off and the wording was too. your others were better, more sophisticated. i like the more sophisticated poems that you write. also you have brake instead of break, you'll wanna edit that. you did a nice job though, keep writing you have talent.

That is beautiful i loved it. and its break not brake. but i wont take that into considerdation when i rate your poem as a 5/5. and the intense feeling, its just breathtaking. however, i dont think you should say knives. its not as attractive. knives usually bring pain..unless your foreshadowing to be hurt by cold eyes.

I like diz poem its really cute! 5/5

Goodness, you need to change your profile, sweetie.
It ' s saying that you ' re not as good of poet as the rest of us, you ' re an amazing poet.

This right here proves it.
I loved the ending especially. :]
Defintly 5/5 on this one!!

And, in the.. fourth stanza, it's break, not brake. Brake is like a car ' s brake, and yeah... you get it. Baha.