by Dark Demise Mar 13, 2007
category :
Life, society /
about society
Rising above you,Running threw you,Punishing you for what you've done, |
And yet, another beautiful poem. The words in this were inspiring. Although, you should try fixing thr first stanza, make it look like the other stanzas. Great poem though. |
by Kalee
This is a very creative way to write a poem. It worked very well. This is a great poem. 5/5 |
Nice write, the flow was good as well as the structure, keep up the good work. |
Hum, a very interesting and raw piece. I really enjoyed the style and atmosphere this had. There were a few spelling errors, "threw" needing to be "through" etc, which really pulls me out of the piece and makes me think about technicalities. Once cleaned up nice and spiffy though, this piece is a definite wonderful read. |
by Tahniya
This is a very unique poem! i really liked it! |