This is beautiful, but too sad!
it flowed perfectly together,
luv gabriella 5/5

Aw. this gave me the shivers, it was great, the repetion of "I tried to tell you I stil cared, I tried to tell you that I was scared" really emphasized your feelings. great piece.
Much Love And Many Kisses, Bex.

I say shoot him. but hey people don't listen to me cuz i believe in little elves bent on taking over the world with the santa hitch. but anyway good poem

your servant:
david

This poem was alright. I didn't like the rhymes, because 'cared' and 'scared' where just one letter off. Rhyming 'me' and 'SUV', was different, but it really didn't benefit this poem in anyway.

"I found you blood after all"
I think you meant to write 'your' instead of 'you'.

It was alright. Had some good emotions in it.