Wow, that was so sad and yet beautiful. Thanks for your comment, it was hard to write.

5/5 and keep up the good work.

Wow!!! i love it im going through that right now with my ex bf its hard moving on great poem 5/5

thanx for commenting mine
*brittany*

Really sweet and touching,i especially liked those

why can't I be Selfish just this time?
why can't I try my best to make you mine?

And i have a advice it would be perfect if you make it all stanzas,but it is just a thought,good job
Have a nice day
Laura

I know how you feel.. and i love how you show it when you right, how much you love this someone.. i love your way with words..

Very true topic, great last stanza. Not as good as the first poem I read, it lacks originality as in being able to address something indirectly. Keep it up

This is absolutely beautiful, you have a wondreful talent. 5/5 keep it up, all of you poems are woderful =] - Alison

Hey, first of all thank you for your comment. :)
Anyways a nice poem. Really touching. I liked how you used the alliteration of the "S" in the first line. This immediately catched my attention and drew me in. I liked the repition of "Why cant i be..." in the third stanza, it created great affect. You didnt have a real structure to the poem... but thats ok i still enjoyed it. Keep writing! xx

This is good.... goot flow, good wording... its all together good, but could be better, 5/5

Wow, it seem like you are saying this from me to the girl i love,lol.
so true message,

I know I can't make you love me if you just don't
You can't make your heart feel something it just won't

the best lines ever that just touched my heart with reality.

"why can't I be Selfish just this time?
why can't I try my best to make you mine?

I know I can't make you love me if you just don't
You can't make your heart feel something it just won't"

Beautiful!!!...i love these lines the most!!...it's so touching n emotions r well penned in this 1!!.....excellent work!..Amazing write!
kudos!!
5/5!!

xxPoojaxx

So cute poem. The message in this poem is so true. 5/5

And if everything happens to go my way
And all the colors in the world are different shades of Grey
And I regret all what happened that day
there will be no going back to yesterday

i liked these lines veryyyyy much..u r so talented and unique in using words and expressing ur ideas..keep it up;)

Terrific...love it!It's really sad and hopeful that the person you love will do well in life and always be happy.Good job

Wow that was wow