I liked it alot it had good rhythm though it was good....I thought there was a lot of emotion I dont think it is your best though

I liked this, althought when i first saw it the way it was set out just kinda threw me off a tiny bit. I think you should of split it into a few stanza's. But i dont know maybe thats just me. I really liked the emotion you displayed in it, it was quite heartfelt. I liked the rhymeing, and this created a steady rhythem, which worked quite well. I like the wya your asking questions... the vocabulary you used was really great. SO yeah i did enjoy it, keep it up and thanks for your ocmment! xx

Im not sure if i like this poem that much. i didnt like how it was written

I thought that it was interesting to read. It was still good though. Good Work

5/5 Jochsey