Great work.

Matt

I loved the imagery within this poem it was very haunting and it is a very interesting piece. There is one thing though I think that the flow is interrupted by the abrupt change in pace in the 5th stanza. For me that change is the one thing that weakens this piece slightly I wouldn't vote it down because of it but I thought I should comment on it.. Apart from that though I thought it was a great haunting and dark piece.

Excellent piece. My eyes drew in every word. You paint a very cold picture.

I reallylike the word choice in this poem, and the imagery creates...images...in my head... lol.
But the one thing it didn't do for me was keep rhythm. With the Constantly changing stanzas, varying in length in sylabbles, it was a little messy. But it's still good.

Rock On Emma \m/