I don't think you need help with it, it's fine how it is. It's a really emtion poem in my personal opininion, i agree with Jess the use of the word 'I' is really powerful

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Yeah i can tell no offense heres some helpful hints
it didnt flow quite right I would maybe fix up the wording a bit more like the 1st two lines rhyme and the third one doesnt idn just an idea 3/5 nice job hope this helps

I agree with kaila it is a good poem and work on caps unless you dont do it on purpose, nessa

I have seen that your poems have 3 lines in each paragraph or stanza. mix it up and try to add a line or two here and there. change is sometimes good.

well thats wat i would do. theres my help. great poem still the same. i love your poems!

5/5 David

Actually Í agree with Dark angel rose.. It's perfect already, so you don't need to edit it at all.. But that's my opinion :) Great job - once again..

Take care