Wow, this was breathtaking, you can see the poem clearly in your mind as you read it, it was beautiful, so sweet, and so sad. 5/5
luv gabriella

Ok I thought the layout was odd and i wish it flowed better but the message i loved and can totally relate to it! you did a good job on this poem keep it up

Aw. This was so sad.. But very beautifully written. It didn't flow as well as it could have.. but wow, that story just really touched me.

This is just absolutely amazing, dear.. The amount of emotions in this, just wow.. Happiness, sadness, anger, hurt, pain.. All put into one.

Amazingly penned, hunny.

Bri [x]

Ok, so this was a really long.. story. To be honest, this didn't really seem like a poem at all. There was dialoge, and descrpitve language, much like a story. So this really did make a good story, it had a good ending, sort of makes the reader curious. Umm, ok so I liked this as a story, but not as a poem, so I'll just pretend I'm voting for it as a story.

Can I just say that was amazing! 5/5. It was a little long but everything you said seemed relivetna and was said in a heart felt way. I loved the bit when you said: "His love whispers.
Dont try to change my mind, its over,
His love says as she slowly walks away." that was my fav bit and i lloved the ending. Really 5/5

x

I like the theme behind this, as many people can relate. My only concern is the length, it seems to drag on. Also the form is a bit weak as it goes on, as though it is losing the flame.

{4/5}

[PygmyPuff]

This poem is amazing, the story is beautiful and so heartfelt, i could just feel the emotion in it. The flow could have been better but it was still great.

Loved It!! 5/5

~Nicole~

Great job! My fav part was:

She sees him walking up,
So she hurries and dries her eyes.
He asks her whats wrong,
He asks her why she was crying.
So beautifully written!
Keep up the great work! :)

take care

This was so beautiful! Yet so sad... The only thing you can do is put " and ' in because without it .. it just makes things confusing... Also at the part they yell.. put a ! and parts they whisper put ... k? Mucha betta! Overall this poem was beautiful I enjoyed reading it very much. This was my favorite part:

She says she doesnt understand,
Why they couldnt just take a break.
She tells him she doesnt want to feel,
Like all she was, is a mistake.

Great Write
Tres Bien!

5/5

Great write. I must admit it was quite confusing in the beginning... I had to read it a couple of times before getting everything straight and flowing. I think a lot of people can relate to your poem... or at least I can. If we all can have our ways or that if life / love is as easy, we may not treasure love as much as we do. Great write. Keep up the good work! 5/5

This is a really good poem. good job and never stop writing poems!

This is more like a story to me, but it is an amazing write. kinda confusing but brilliant!

Nice story penned thru ur words...........good write

luv

This is the one about me

Wow
i think this has to be one of my new favorite poems..i think that says enough

it was like a story amazing job

im adding you to my favorites =]

brittany (MD)

Now this one so far is your best poem ever!!! I loved it and I can so relate to it and Woww!!!! It was tremendous!!

Wow this was my favorite poem definatly.. really long but you managed to capture my attention until the very end. Love is such a complex game that people play and it never gets easier, especialy when confusion is involved. The last stanza was my favorite one by far. cause it makes you think bout love in general and what it really is.. nice job. 5/5

This was really amazing, truley wonderfully written. It was quite long, but it keept me intrested all the way though it. the word choice was excellent, the flow was flawless, and the emtions were deep and strong. this is by far the best poem that I have read al day long. 5/5 although you clearly deserve more.