Wow sooo much anger lol I love this poem, shows how you really feel. Very nice choice of words and Loved It!! 5/5 great job!

Again another great poem by you Kaila. the wording was splendid!

5/5 for always. David

Wow....u really expressed how u felt about her. good though!!!

xoxo kisses

The emotion in this poem was really strong. Honestly, I feel this way about a certain person that I know.

Good job! Keep it up! =]

This was amazing, the words were perfect, and the anger flowed so gorgeously, 5/5
luv gabriella

Another really powerful poem. I could really feel all the anger and frustration you were expressing here. Great write!
5/5

marcella

Harsh poem, but I actually liked it... good job 5/5

good ryhming it all made sense

Ur poems are all so good! i especially love this line "I feel like you have me under some kind of intoxication."

Oh wow. As so many people above, much anger. 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Wow... this poem has a lot of anger in it, but it is touching. i like the flow and some of the wording, not the best i have read but i still like it

WOW. This is a great poem. Alot of anger and sadness, you tell it like it is and thats what i like in poems. Your not afraid to hold back on anything. 5/5

<UnToLd TrUtH>

Awesome job
LOved it!
Keep up the great work.

Take care

Really interesting and you feel that poem when reading it
Good job
Laura

Your eyes,
they burn into me with every glare.
That little smirk,
makes me want to rip out my hair.
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That stanza is a little off flow.. I guess. Lol.
It goes from small to big, small to big.
So, it would flow better if it was something along the lines of...

'' Your eyes burn into
me with every glare.
That little smirk makes me
want to rip my hair out. ''
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You want to be better then me,
so bad.
You were the worst mistake,
your parents could've ever had.
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This stanza is the same as the other one I told you about.. So, it would flow better if it were along these lines:

''You want to be
better than me, so bad.
You were the worst mistake that
youre parents could have had ''
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Hun, this poem was quite outstanding.
I loved it, great emotion, once again.
And, also easily related to. :]

Remember, when I critique, it's not to critize your work, it's to show you ways I THINK, you could improve. It doesn't even have to affect you..
I'm just saying that because, I dislike telling the bad things of an outstanding poem. :/
And, that's the case here.. eh.

5/5
-Teria

Wow,, That is some deep poem by just reading the words I could tell how much you loathed. Its an amazing poem haven't seen one like it since a while. xx keep it up!

Wow i loved this. it reminds me of me when i get mad at my siblings. great way of expressing your anger and inner feelings.you did a great job on the poem and it was very well written. keep up the good work 5/5

Wow that was really... evil... lol that's the best word i can use to describe it. you did a really nice job, it was well written i liked it. it had good flow and good wording, very good 5/5

Wow. i can feel the screaming! so powerful...and then the end. it like becomes something a litlle softer, like a whispered pain.

Another great poem, you are an amazing writer, this poem has so much emotion in it, it reminds me of how i feel about my sister sometimes, anyway it was very well written very wonderful job 5/5

Wonderful! So far this is the best write you have. I only found a few mistakes... It's great to know that you like to use puncuation but don't use it after every line. It kinda throws you off. If it helps write it out in lines and you can tell where you need to put commas and periods like here:

You make me
scream with frustration!
I feel like you have me under
some kind of intoxication.

There you go ... again you have trouble with flow.. though in this one you did a lot better for this stanza put:

You are making me,
scream with frustration!
I feel like you have me under,
some kind of intoxication.

Mucha betta. Over all babe you did a magneficent job. :) I enjoyed reading this. Amazing emotion and rhyming. Just work on that flow!

Great Write!

5/5