So much anger :P

5/5

Grr... a lot of anger in this poem but once again you express it well.. not my favorite but still a great write :)

An... intresting read.. it seems so ful of anger and hatred. Theirs a story behind your words... it sounds like an intresting story yet its something that i dont think many people want to hear. Anywyas liek i said its a really powerful read. When i read it laoud i felt myself reading it with so much anger held in my voice... so much hatred. Its quite sad, yet its excellent how you managed to make me read it like that. The title of the poem makes the reader intrested in what the poem has to say. The structure of the poem could be improved though. But it was a good read. Keep writing. xx

I love the emotion. I really liked this poem. 5/5

This by far has been your best poem, out of the ones I've read. You have talant, really you do..
I can really relate to this poem..

"You make me,
scream with frustration!
I feel like you have me under,
some kind of intoxication.

Your eyes,
they burn into me with every glare.
That little smirk,
makes me want to rip out my hair."

GREAT stanzas, as well as the last.. Again, really well done, and fantastic flow, keep writing, girly. =)
~Ally~

I think I've read this before, but then I don't..
Lol. I'm not sure, I might have.
But, oh well.. I guess.

I think was a great poem, something I don't see felt between two sisters, but I could be wrong. :/ I have no sister. Lol.
But, it was great emotion, rhyme scheme, and flow.

Great Job.
5/5

Good write as always, you have a way with words. Great Job.

This line, "I hate how all your about," should be, "I hate how all you're about," you used the wrong "your" it should be "you're" which means "you are" just a minor mistake.

In this Stanza,

"You want to be better then me,
so bad.
You were the worst mistake,
your parents could've ever had."

I felt that the second line was too short compared to the others. Perhaps try making it a little longer, so that the flow doesn't ubrupty stop.

Other than that this was a wonderful write, with great expression through out. Good job.

Peace, Joe

I really like the meaning behind this...like the word choic e of intoxication! Great job!

It was so full of anger...I loved it!!! Very powerful. You have a way with words.

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Wow, the emotions are just pouring out of this piece. Very intense. I can not say that I can relate to this poem because my sister and I are very close but over all this was a great piece.

Love the passion, keep up the great work ma.

Cicely

You want to be better then me,
so bad.
You were the worst mistake,
your parents could've ever had.

Best lines ever. I can just feel and even hear anger in this piece. WOW!!! Very very good