A good poem but to me it was a little hard to read, the tenses are off a little so the flow isnt great but it is a good poem and after rereading it i understood it and liked it a lot.
nessa

That imagery is breathtaking, it feels so real you can see it, 5/5 the emotion flowing inside of the poem makes it so alive 5/5 again
gabriella

DARIENNNNN. Omg, wow. I missed reading your poetry.. You are so amazing. This was just wow. So dark & deep. It flowed really well & painted a lovely picture.. Well, not really cos its sad.. but you know. :]

I am painted crimson red
like a sea of blood
Many have died here
but I am the only victim

Needless to say I survived
The hate and bloodshed
Once a peaceful ground
demolished from love's battle

^ These were my favorite stanzas :] So powerful.

Amazingly penned, babe.

Bri [x]

A sad yet powerful write Darien.... it flows well, very descriptive, good choice of words. Well done!

...It's good. The words were excellent and the imagery too cool. Last stanza is definitely my fave. But I must admit the entire thing was attention grabbing. Cool write.
~Faith-less

This is quite a powerful piece, so haunting. Very well/beautifully written.

"You are the weapons
destroying everything"
^^ Nice phrasing!

"Many have died here
but I am the only victim"
^^^ I like this line, very powerful.

Well, I won't say wow because that's an obvious response so I'll just say Awesome! It was one of the best poems I've read on here so far!

Cat

How true is the pain love can put us through, wonderful poem.

This is really a good piece of writting... Very well written... Keep it up!

Beautiful.

Very good. Nice wording too, excellent grammar and no spelling mistakes. 5

Darien this was beautiful. I am tearing for you, for your pain. It was so vivid in this poem, it hurt. I promise that you will not remain a bloody battle-field forever. There will be others who will reach out their hands to pull you back to paradise, just hold on until they come. There is someone out there for you who will bring you higher in life, and make you want to be stronger than you have even been in your life. Just keep holding on until she comes.

~Miko~

Loved it, great imagery

Loved this poem... it was interesting and pretty amazing

Awhh. Darienn, are you okay hunni? This was a very emotional poem. The descriptions were simple yet conveyed how you were feeling in a very metaphoric way. I love how you described love as a battlefieldd like that song by michael jackson. Haha. You used good vocabulary and had good descripitons. Ily 5/5

Love is a battlefield. And a tough one at that! 5/5

This was a really good poem. alot of emotion in it. the flow was good. great job. 5/5

~Chelsea

I liked this it was very original not one of your better ones but it was better then anything I could do I love it...

Hey,
I like the overall metaphor you have going on hear. Youve described it all as a battlefield, bringing the subject og war and stuff in. Yet the poem is all about love. Battle of love. It brings this entire new yet intresting concept into place, it really captures the readers attention and makes them want to read more. Anyways your poem makes the reader curious of what happened to spark of this battle. I like how youve described yourself as well as the "Opponant". The overall flow was good. To improve i think you should use punctuation. Other then that, an excellent read. Keep writing! xx

At first I was thinking oh, Pat Benatar is amazin, I wanna read this poem. I thought it would be kind of similar but it is so dark and just oh so wonderful. Again I love how you take such common ideas or songs and twist them in your poetic sense. Absolutely amazing.
Loved this:
Many have died here
but I am the only victim

5/5