Sarah, this was just amazing. Such an incredible write. I wish I could use the words you use! It's like I saw the whole story unfolding. Beautiful write! 5/5.

love ya!
` Liz

My tears after reading this poem are genuine. The flow of the poem matched the salty stream pouring from my eyes. Yet another job well done.

The rhyming in this is just magnificant! The flow was beautifully set out. It was wonderful. I could relate to this, I'm sure a vast number of people here could, also. A joy to read.

This poem came a very close second in my contest and i think it was beautiful. i loved the imagery and the wording in it, i just loved how amazingly well you described everything in it, i felt as if i was there and i actually felt emotion from it.

I loved this poem, it is really great. I love this stanza:

I wanted to be your fantasy,
And guide you through life happily
But then you turned and my flame died,
And now I know I barely tried.
She's everything and I am pained
To hear her whisper your sweet name.

Excellent job! I liked how it rhymed too. 5++/5

~Lizzie~

This is a really good poem. I really like the part,
"She's everything and I am pained
To hear her whisper your sweet name.
I wanted to visit our special place
And fall in love inside your grace,"
especially the last line. I can really relate to that.
keep writing
peace
soffe

Awwe . such a lovely poem
I wanted to be your fantasy,
And guide you through life happily
But then you turned and my flame died,
i loved these lines alot. maybe these lines relates to me. you words have great power. and these are expressed good.
take care 5/5

This was good, the flow was flawless, and an interesting point of view. strong ending and even stronger emotion coming through. great write. 5/5

Loved the poem. It was well written and meaningful!! 5/5 :)