For the most part the poem was brilliant. However there were a few hiccoughs in the rhythm. Just minor spelling errors that caused me to double take. In the fourth stanza the third line you meant his instead of he's. And perhaps on the last line use semi-colons instead of a dash. It gives the reader a more prolonged hesitation and allows them to follow the flow from previous parts of the poem. Other than that, I really really liked this poem. Great job.

Breath taking (how ironic that is!)
You make my day and give me inspiration everytime I read your poems. They're SO damn good!

i esp[eacially LOVE the last line it was sort of comical!

Please keep contact.

Love,
_Emma

Dark and story like! Excellent combo! 5/5