My Daddy

Hey, i loved the emotion youve displayed in this poem, its real and wow just amazing! The repitition of "My daddy" really made the poem seem even more hearfelt and touching. The meotion was amazingly displayed in it, and thats the best thing about the poem! ANywyas the peom had a good steady flow. I liekd the story you had behind it, it was truly sad, but yeah helped emotion so well. to improve i suggest you use punctuation so the reader can read the poem the way you want it to be read, but other then a great job! Keep it up! xx

This is very intense but i love it anyway. i love how you expressed your feelings towards him. im sure youll be okay. comment back

This poem expresses some feelings i have about my father too. you're not alone in this. check out my poem called giving up....it s really a song but its about my father too. id love to hear back from you.

This is so sad but such a good poem

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