Wow...I love it danielle! *hugs*

and...

OMFG HAPPY EARLY SAINT PATRICKS DAY!

Everything...
Except me

I love these lines, they sound like me. Very intense poem

This poem was amazing! the desription and structure was clearly evident!

the lines i loved the most were:

Drowning, slowly
Can't reach the surface
Cold clammy hands
Pulling me back under
Gasping for breath
Must reach the surface
Or become one of my fears

well done again. 5/5 from me, David

This whole idea of the nightmare really was drawn out in my mind. I think you have a great way of wording things. I really like this poem! Good work! =]

Dani,

Overall a wonderful dark poem. LOved these lines:

"Drowning, slowly
Can't reach the surface
Cold clammy hands
Pulling me back under
Gasping for breath
Must reach the surface
Or become one of my fears"

Maybe changing one line:
Or become one of my fears
To
Or become lost in my fears

Tends to give the piece a more powerful impact. Either way, good job.

Always,
Jeannie

Wow that was intense, my dreams havn't quite reached that caliber yet although some of mine would really make interesting poems.

//Khrystyne\\