I think this is pretty good! i give u bout a 4/5!

~shanny~

That was good..i give you a 4/5 as well....but great job!!!!...comment back!

This is a good poem 5/5

A bit short...i like it though....can relate...a 5/5 from me :D

I like this one alot, you have a nice rhyme set. you seem to be really talented in poetry. keep up the great job.

Short but to the point... people can easily relate. Good job with this and keep on writing well! take care

The look that i see have become so different,
the way you and me talk is not the same,
you seem to be so far and so distant,
you don't seem to care when i call your name.

MY FAVORITE STANZA ^^^

Great work, t was nicely penned, i like it a lot. it got the message across, my fave lines
The look that i see have become so different,
the way you and me talk is not the same,
you seem to be so far and so distant,
you don't seem to care when i call your name.

A good poem, could i suggest you capitalize the start of lines.
I liked the flow and imagery, you have talent. Your poems are very sweet and romantic.
my love, Tara-Kay
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This is realy good. i wish i had thought of a poem like this to express wuts going on between me and chris. 5/5

Ok theres some typing errors.. And i have to point them out.. cause it bugs me lol...

The look that i see have become so different,
have should be HAS

why can't you come and pretend it alright
it would be better as it's

i have **to** much to say --to should be too

your arms and together **we're** lay-- and i think we're should be we'll

If i offended you by this please don't be... IT's just i know some times poems and quotes when you go into edit changes the words.. and maybe it did that... Either way I'm jsut trying to help...

Besides all that is a great poem!
Ash

Nice job! i like how ur simple words gets to me =D