I liked this one, short but, interesting. Nice write! 5/5

marcella

Its short...it has more emotion the the first one, but if there was more too it it wold be 100 times better
4/5

Short, but nice! :)

I agree with BloodScars, It would be much better if you would continue it a little bit more..

Anyway, the idea was great!

Good job; 4.5/5
Keep it up!
&& Take care!

Wow I loved the emotion that you gave off in this poem. The feeling was amazing, you felt so much with so little words. The ending I think needs a bit of work, I felt that it just sort of stopped and needs to continue on a bit longer, but other than that it was great. Nice write.