Very nice... I see u have had a go at what i was talking about with trying not to use 4 line stanzas. Uve done a great job i love the last few lines. Hits nicely.

This is a great poem David. GREAT POEM. 5/5

Kalee

Wonderful Poem! I enjoyed it very much. I loved your imagination and emotion you put into the poem. Your flow was awesome, and your rhyming was too. It all went together so smoothly. I really like this part:

The meaning so hidden though
Like the meaning of life
The question nobody knows
Yet isnt it love and loss
We live with it right under our nose
Love is our friend, and loss is our foe
Who will win, nobody knows...

Wonderul poem!

5/5

This is so beautiful, it's so sweet, 5/5 forevor (again) you write such amazing poems, wow.
gabriella

Great job on your poem. I really enjoyed reading this piece.

Yet the love so real and clear
Its feeling is electric
When you say the words I want to hear,
The wonder and the spark
It ignites my once cold heart

Loved this stanza.
5/5
Take care Cindy

Wow! Great poem.. the flow was awesome and the way you said things was just... beautiful. The rythmn was sweet. And I get this sense of a meaning behind the poem, but it isn't blarinigly obvious. Amazing write, even better read. Great job 5/5
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

WOrds jump out. Leaving me amazed. It describes everything needed. The flow was awsome. not one thing needed to be changed. you have a pure and true gift right there.

Wow, I really like this poem a lot. Especially the last bit. You have a great writing style! <3

5/5!

Wow great words David! I loved the flow and the meaning behind this poem. My favorite part was definitly the ending.
Love is our friend, and loss is our foe
Who will win, nobody knows...
I mean wow who comes up with something like that!?
I give it a 5/5 great job!

Just beautifil!

I would have to agree, the flow was a little bit off but it didn't mess with the meaning. I really liked it. If you want a place to really let some emotions out or submit your poetry, or maybe even make some friends come check Azurerain.com/forum out. :)

Your poems are truly amazing they soar right through my heart

This is really good.i love it!