Really have full of emotion and a fairytale romance,you are back of words,it's cool,i especially liked

I hear her speak and my heart starts to melt
the feeling i got from her words i have never felt
she leans back and her face starts to look sad
as i remembered the moments we once had,

So sweet
And i agree you write far away of a 14
Keep it up
Laura

Awww!!! This is so cute yet sad at the same point. I can definitly relate to it. I hope this girl of yours comes to her senses because if you can write a poem as good as that about her you must be in love!!

Very sweet and romantic. I liked it, and I like how you described the feeling of chasing someone or longing for the person who doesn't seem to look your way quite as often. I especially liked the lines,
"so I stand beside her smelling the rose
how much i love her only god knows"
and
"If she was thinking the same thing i was
could love be for no reason but because?"

A couple things though, in line 2 stanza 3 "mu" should be "my" right? I also thought that line went off rythm and was too long and wordy. I also thought you used the word "as" too much and in places where it could have been left out.

Other than that though I thought you wrote a very romantic and heart felt poem, overall I thought you did a good job. well done

Theres few spelling mistakes. But I still like this poem a lot =) It all sounds so sincere and sweet. But it doesn't feel like you have much of a rhythem, and a lot of the lines were too long or short. It just needs a bit of rewording and editing and it would be perfect.

This is a poem tht i can just go aww too good poem.. thxs for join the club ive been waiting for someone to join...thxs and welcome =)

Omg i can only say one thing to this........................................................................it was excellent, u should check out all my poems even though there arent very many, but if u can then thx alot
~Stephan~

On these lines:

"she looks at me as I keep mu jaw up as it wants to drop
she sit back down looking around"

I think you wanted the word 'my' instead of 'mu', I think you know that already. And 'sit' should be 'sits'. Other than those I really liked it. This can probably be related to almost everyone lol. Anyways very well written. Keep writing!

YOU ARE A BRILLIANT POET! I absolutely love this; it is so hard to find a guy who does poetry, keep it up!!

Who is this gurl, yo fo shizzle.....u are a good poet, did u even know it?? ahaha i rhyme all the time!!!