Eternal Sunshine

Interesting rhyme scheme actually. Thought that maybe it didn't have one at all (until I saw the other two). The vocab used was quite intriguing also, nicely done... hmm, I begining to like some of the newer poets here. ^_^x

This was a good poem
i enjoyed it
my favorite lines were
Feeling the breeze on my skin
At the balcony still waiting
It won't stop shining no need to seek
I finally found my enternal sunshine

This was really beautiful. Full of emotion & love. It flowed good..

I didn't like how the rhyme scheme was REALLY different for each stanza

It was a peaceful morning
Feeling the breeze on my skin
At the balcony still waiting
For sunrise like a gean
^ This didn't rhyme at all. No rhyme scheme was done in this stanza.

Rain started to fall when I was on my way
To work I shouldn't have been late today
But when I saw a man that looks like a kane
Sun started to shine brightly again

^ this had a rhyme scheme of aabb

He asked me to date after a week
I gave him two girls and we're fine
It won't stop shining no need to seek
I finally found my eternal sunshine

^ & this one had a rhyme scheme of : abab.

I really noticed it.. & it just bothered me.

But it was beautiful, nonetheless.

Bri [x]

So beautiful! 5/5 You have lots of talent! :)
Keep it up!

Awww cute i loved this one nice job yay i loved it