Such a dark poem, i really got into it. well done. keep writng plz.

5/5 David

My oh my....ur really 11?
well...if i didnt know that it would've rated this 4/5 !! amazing...but taking ur age into consideration...defiantely a 5/5...good work...keep it up...and think where ud be in a couple of years!

Great like always Nick 5/5
I really loved this one and what it was about =)
Hope your taking care of yourself :)
***Rhea***

Wow. Thats really awesome. So Jealous of your work, it's amazing!
Thank you for your comment, much appreciated.
I added you to my favourites list.
MASH fan i see?? x

Awesome! 5/5

I actually kind of liked this. The wording you used was simple, but the effect was that it was almost like a poem translated from, say, a song written in another language into English. Like there could have been rhyming, in its original form, but through the translation it got changed - and what remained was a subtle, almost chanting rhythm, suggesting that you only saw the surface of something that went deeper. I'm not sure if that makes sense, but that was my impression when I read it : )

Thankyou for commenting my poems! I really like yours too. You are really good. Keep it up!

Wow amazing........! i keep on reading it i would adore how u wirte it was so great and very nice words and rhyme really great! this poem is really impressive im sure some readers would leave some very lovely comments...keep on writing and keep it up !5/5

God bless!

It's ryhme-free but so cool
I loved the wording and the flow
Well done

Wow, amazing poem your a great writer

keep up the good work

brittany (MD)

Not my style, it has no ties with your life. Just words.

You're 11.
Wait.
…You're 11? Ok, I'm sorry, it's just difficult to comprehend and have it register in my head that an 11 year old has better talent than most writers of my age or even above. Hah! This is just phenomenal! My word, this is a doubtlessly well written piece, you’ve explored thematic language and profound imagery throughout the poem. The structure and flow within the write is constant, and I am delighted to have found you and your work. Brilliant piece, young man, keep it up and you will be a greater success one day :).

P.S: I know I won't be underestimating the ability of people who write at your age, or younger. This site actually requires more individuals such as yourself and work like yours. Well done, once again :).

Wow.. and you're only 11!!

I am very impressed at your poetry... Especially since you are only eleven years old.. Great Job, Kid!!5/5

Love the poem great job...5/5.......your are a really good writter......oh and if you will can you please rate and comment on my poems thankz.....

Wow! I rrly like it :)

Well done! 5/5, you have a lot of talent. Keep writing!

That was...INCREDABLE!!!!!! omg...I really liked it...please keep writing...

Completly 5/5 really deep and im still amazed youre only 12!